  众所周知，记叙文不好写。 写景的英文作文尤其不好写。 而写景抒情的英文作文，更是难上加难。 该怎么情景交融还不油腻? 该怎么内容丰富且语言优质呢? 不妨从今天的写作中寻找一些灵感吧! 先看题： 假定你是李华，昨天你游览了所在城市的植物园。请给在你校学习的外国留学生Dick 写一封邮件，内容要点: 1.游览时间，地点 2.游览感受 3.推荐观赏 注意：1.词数100左右;2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 写作第一步：审题 自主检测 审主题： 审文体： 审要点： 审时态 审人称： 答案公布： 审主题：游览植物园的经历和感受 审文体：记叙文 审时态：一般过去时为主 审人称：第一人称(我)为主 特别强调：记叙文必不可少的要素:5W 写作第二步：搭建内容 第一段：日常问候+写作背景+写作目的 亲爱的Dick,最近怎么样?希望一切都好。(日常问候)昨天我游览了一个著名的植物园(所给信息)，这次游览使我感触良多(细节补充)，所以我迫不及待想和你分享。(写作目的) 第二段：游览经历(所见所闻) + 游览感受(所思所感) 这个植物园位于处西南方向,距离我的学校大概20公里。我乘出租车到达那里(细节补充)。我进入植物园的那一瞬间，各种各样美丽的花儿和绿色的树木映入眼帘(视觉)。鸟儿在树梢欢快地歌唱(听觉)，微风拂过，花香四溢(嗅觉)，沿着一条小路慢慢走，我感觉非常放松和愉悦(感觉)。沉浸在这美妙的景色中，我情不自禁的想到(细节补充--过渡句)，人与自然和谐相处是多么的美好。(感受) 第三段：毫不夸张的说，这个植物园是像你这样的自然爱好者的天堂，所以我强烈建议你来亲身体验。 写作第三步：优化语言 第一段：日常问候+写作背景+写作目的 亲爱的Dick,最近怎么样?希望一切都好。(日常问候)昨天我游览了一个著名的植物园(所给信息)，这次游览使我感触良多(细节补充)，所以我迫不及待想和你分享。(写作目的) Dear Dick, 普通：How are you recently? I hope everything goes well.Yesterday I went to a famous botanical garden and I have a lot of feelings.Therefore, I am writing to share them with you. 优化： How is everything going? I hope all is well.Yesterday, I visited a distinguished botanical garden, which left such a deep impression on me that hardly can I wait to share my feelings with you. 第二段： 游览经历(所见所闻)+游览感受(所思所感) 这个植物园位于处西南方向,距离我的学校大概20公里(要点)，我乘出租车到达那里(细节补充)。我进入植物园的那一瞬间，各种各样美丽的花儿和绿色的树木映入眼帘(视觉)。鸟儿在树梢欢快地歌唱(听觉)，微风拂过，花香四溢(嗅觉)。沿着一条小路慢慢走，我感觉非常放松和愉悦(感觉)。沉浸在这美妙的景色中，我情不自禁的想到(细节补充--过渡句)，人与自然和谐相处是多么的重要。(感受) 普通：The botanical garden lies in the southwest of my school and is about 20 kilometers away .I went to there by taxi.The moment I entered it, I can see all kinds of beautiful flowers and green trees .There are birds singing happily on the top of the tree.The wind blows and the fragrance of flowers is everywhere . Walking slowly along a road, I felt very relaxed and pleased.Bathed in the beautiful scenery, I can’t help thinking the importance of human living in harmony with the nature. 优化：Located in the southwest , the botanical garden is about 20 kilometers away from my school.I arrived there by taxi. The moment I entered the garden, a variety of beauteous flowers and green trees came into my view.Some birds were singing merrily on the treetop .Kissed by the breeze ，I noticed that the fragrance of the flower spread far and wide.Waling slowly along a track,I experienced immeasurable relaxation and joy. Immersed in the fabulous view, I can’t help thinking the importance of human living in harmony with the nature. 第三段：毫不夸张的说，这个植物园是像你这样的自然爱好者的天堂!我强烈建议你来亲身体验。 普通：I am sure that for people who like the nature , just like you will view the botanical garden a a paradise.I do suggest you to come here and experience it by yourself. 优化：It can be said without exaggeration that the botanical garden is a paradise for nature lovers like you.I strongly suggest that you come here and experience it in person. 全文欣赏： 普通版： Dear Dick, How are you recently? I hope everything goes well.Yesterday I went to a famous botanical garden and I have a lot of feelings.Therefore, I am writing to share them with you. The botanical garden lies in the southwest of my school and is about 20 kilometers away .I went to there by taxi.The moment I entered it, I can see all kinds of beautiful flowers and green trees .There are birds singing happily on the top of the tree.The wind blows and the fragrance of flowers is everywhere . Walking slowly along a road, I felt very relaxed and pleased.Bathed in the beautiful scenery, I can’t help thinking the importance of human living in harmony with the nature. I am sure that for people who like the nature , just like you will view the botanical garden a a paradise.I do suggest you to come here and experience it by yourself. Yours, Li Hua 优化版： Dear Dick, How is everything going? I hope all is well.Yesterday, I visited a distinguished botanical garden, which left such a deep impression on me that hardly can I wait to share my feelings with you. Located in the southwest , the botanical garden is about 20 kilometers away from my school.I arrived there by taxi. The moment I entered the garden, a variety of beauteous flowers and green trees came into my view.Some birds were singing merrily on the treetop .Kissed by the breeze ，I noticed that the fragrance of the flower spread far and wide.Walking slowly along a track,I experienced immeasurable relaxation and joy. Immersed in the fabulous view, I can’t help thinking the importance of human living in harmony with the nature. It can be said without exaggeration that the botanical garden is a paradise for nature lovers like you.I strongly suggest that you come here and experience it in person. Yours, Li Hua 注：本文为爱酱每日英语原创！欢迎广大师生借鉴使用和批评指正！ 创作不易，请勿抄袭搬运或商用！版权所有，侵权必究！ |
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